One small point: I got lost around the middle lines, since, counting back from the beginning, the line "“Breathe, Wally. It was just a bunch of mes and G-Girl.”" should be Wally's line, and it's not obvious which pair of lines in said by the same person.
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One small point: I got lost around the middle lines, since, counting back from the beginning, the line "“Breathe, Wally. It was just a bunch of mes and G-Girl.”" should be Wally's line, and it's not obvious which pair of lines in said by the same person.